I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 8 and in 2021 I will be a year 9. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
in writing we are learning to show not tell we are learning to use a fuw days ago we do some writing about mud and we disgribed it and play in it this is my writing.
Hi Ashton, I like how you used strong similes about the yuck mud. Did you take the photo of the mud yourself? Next time you could re-read and check your spelling.I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Hi Ashton,
ReplyDeleteI like how you used strong similes about the yuck mud. Did you take the photo of the mud yourself? Next time you could re-read and check your spelling.I look forward to reading more of your work.