Test review

Kia ora today we had to review on our writing test from term 1 and our term 4 test these are all the stuff that i need to work on

For punctuation I need to 

Use commas to show clauses (different parts of a sentence).

I need to add punctuation to create mood and show greater detail to hook my readers in.

For my vocab I need to

Use words and phrases that grab the reader’s attention and interest.

For my organisation I need to

Link together sentences that match what is happening in my writing.

Make headings vivid and noticeable for the reader.

For my sentence I need to

Hook the reader in by thinking carefully about the way I use my sentences.

For structure I need to

Try to match all parts of of my writing to the text type.

For my ideas I need to

Make my ideas original, so the reader can connect with them.

Add extra information, detail or facts that explain my thinking (elaboration)

For my O.R.E.O I have done my first opinion i have put in my reason, I failed at putting my evidence into my writing and I have failed to put in my second opinion

truffle

 Kia ora today in cooking we made truffles they had coconut, coco powder, butter, icing sugar, dried apricots and crushed wine biscuits. we creamed the butter then added the icing sugar  we mixed the dry ingredients together and the added the butter and icing sugar together and then made it into small balls then left them in the fridge to set then we ate them and they were crunchy.

 

The Hatched plan (creative story)

Kia ora today we had to write a story about a picture it was a snowy night and we had to make a story out of it. Here is what I wrote let me know what you think.

A pitch black sky with trees that reach the sky almost touching the stars with snow gliding onto the trees. The dark trees stretch over to the other side of the house with snow already covering the branches. The white fluffy snow covering the grass and shining from the light of the warm fire on the inside of the house. Little Timmy asleep in the second floor of the house waiting for footsteps on his roof.

Suddenly little Timmy heard thumping footsteps just above him quickly he jumped up in his dark blue pyjamas. There were no more footsteps on the roof Santa knew that he was awake and rushed away before he could be seen. Little Timmy set up a trap to catch Santa he put out trip wire attached to a bell. He fell a sleep and then he heard the bell ring he ran down stairs but he only seen his cat.

Timmy looked to his left and seen Santa staring at him with a angry look. Then he took out his long list found Timmy's name and put him onto the naughty list. Timmy ran back up stairs crying himself back to sleep. He had a bad dream that he stayed on the naughty list and never got off of the naughty list.

Then he woke up and looked down stairs under the tree and there were presents reaching up to the roof. He questioned why there were presents when he seen Santa write his name on the other list. Then he realised he might have put Timmy onto the good list. That made Timmy think what did he do that made him on the naughty list?

Fun run

Kia ora today we had to choose different topics I choose to talk about the fun run. The fun run was fun I wore a white shirt so it got really colourful. The first time that we ran around we didn't get any colour or wet but then we ran around again and we got colour and wet there was some tarp. We could slide on the tarp I slid all the water splashed up beside me and got my teacher wet. Then we went over a bouncy castle on the second time that we went around people were hiding in the bouncy castle. when the year sevens were running people had some water bottles and started to do a water fight but then when people were filling up there water bottles but Whaea Jude stopped people from doing water fights.